===== From awebb@trans-tec.co.uk: Could have used more smoothing on the focal blur. ===== From maarten_hofman@hotmail.com: The room is a bit repetitive and too neat, and hiding it using the blur doesn't seem to work well. I like the level of darkness in the picture. ===== From houston_roadrunner@yahoo.com: The focal blur made the foreground grainy, nearly the whole top half could have been clipped and the scene seems more on shock or supprise than loneliness. ===== From : I am not sure I understand the fuzziness up near the front. Is this an artifact or a poor method of blur? Nice concept, though the room seems to be mostly just a few dumplicated objects. Perhaps this is what you intended. ===== From awilcox@dreampeach.com: The pose of the figure gives me a sense of fear, rather than lonliness. ===== From beighton155@yahoo.com: Nice idea, tho t looks like the classroom has been filled with dry-ice,maybe a little less fog would improve it ===== From novotek@web.de: schönes ding - gleicht einer albtraumszene. schade nur, dass aus technischer sicht die unschärfe im vordergrund so "dotty" ist. ===== From ruy@hipernet.com.br: Good concept. ===== From dapigg2000@yahoo.com: They must be playing `Titanic' nobody's there. Good job. ===== From cfusner@enter.net: The image is a little dark, but not too much so. Actually, that gives it an unexpected quality: it seems like a frightened student racing through the halls of a deserted school at night. This, too, fits the loneliness theme, since fright is sometimes a result of being alone in a spooky place. It makes me wonder what he is running from... but then, sometimes it is best to leave this to the viewers' own imagination. ===== From tim.nikias@gmx.de: Hm. Lonely? Shocked, yeah. Seems more like fright. ===== From suso@suso.org: Doesn't really convey loneliness to me. Nice try with the lights, they are just to inaccurate. They should have all been uniformly made. It looks like they were individually done. I wish you would have taken more time to get rid of the graininess. Also, the time on the clock indicates 1 (I thought you said it was morning). ===== From rclee@oklahoma.net: Good lighting. Reminds me of a nightmare. ===== From glenn@mccarters.net: Interesting situation, I'm not sure that "lonliness" is the right word = here, though. I would like to see a little variety in the position of the desks and = chairs, instead of being all perfectly aligned. ===== From bill@apocalypse.org: Good body language on the human form ===== From jamesrskemp@eml.cc: I thought the idea behind the image was good. I myself had done something similar my freshmen year in college, except we never had an exam at all... On my screen, it is a little dark, and I'm not sure why it would be... I would suggest brighter lighting, unless you wanted to show that this is a nightmare (and hence it is dark - double meaning), but just because it is a dream does not mean that it has to be dark (see the movie "Waking Life" for proof). ===== From p_chan@shaw.ca: Very interesting effects with media, fog and blur. One thing that would make the scene look more natural is if the desks and chairs we randomly moved a little bit off their exact position for the rows - right now they are too perfectly place. ===== From StephenF@whoever.com: Has a nice feel to it... the figure is well-posed. The sharp edges of the light cones bother me a bit. The fog seems out of place inside a classroom. The blur effect is interesting... I kind of like the graininess here. ===== From jl@artcom-gmbh.de: The foreground looks a bit rough. ===== From clem@dhol.org: Alone? Yes. Shocked? Yes. Upset? Yes. Lonely? No, not really.