===== From marlo.steed@uleth.ca: The concept works. The pencil needs some work - in terms of realism. Likewise the paper needed to be a bit bent and not totally flush with the surface. ===== From tigerhawk@stic.net: I really like where you were going with this; it certainly brought back memories! I took away so many points for the technical merit because the lead at the end of the pencil did not go all the way around and it was a rectangle instead of a prism. The lighting and transition to the real dungeon could have been a little cleaner. But otherwise, it was a very very cool idea. Great job. ===== From a.martone@retepnet.it: Carina l'idea, ma l'oggetto piu' interessante e' il dado rosso sulla sinistra. Dovresti provare con l'arealight (in modo da non avere ombre che spaccano il capello) e usare un po' piu' di oggetti tondi (superellipsoid, lathe, sphere_sweep, etc) per non avere troppe spigolosita'. ===== From rgow@lanset.com: The wood tabltop looks good, and the dice. The lamps on the wall look dark but yet cast shadows and light. Probably needs a high ambient finish. ===== From jacoons@ameritech.net: Obvious problems with the pencil (half-pencil?). ===== From jgrimbert@free.fr: Pen needs more work. ===== From fine@head.cfa.harvard.edu: This looks good at first, but suffers from errors, like the tip of the pencil, and the paper sliding underneath the stone texture. ===== From jouni@mikrobitti.fi: Another great idea. Too bad you didn't have the time to do more finishing. Why is that pencil metallic? :-) ===== From jussi.kantola@iki.fi: most of this image is a scanned pencil drawing ... ===== From bertram.henze@t-online.de: Different effort has been spent on different items. Why does the red die have so perfect slightly rounded edges, but the pencil has sharp edges like a folded paper model of a pencil? Some of the grey walls seem to have difficulty to meet the ground properly - Ok, this is the dream zone traversing from game to reality, but also dreams have to be convincing. ===== From file: I think the pencil is way to big and reflective Notable for textures ===== From file: I think the pencil is way to big and reflective Notable for textures